We may have a blooper coming soon!
We may have a blooper of some little mistakes that we made and a little film at the end when we where talking about what we enjoyed about making the clips and just some general conversation to each other about the acting etc.
I hate out-takes!
ReplyDeleteVery pleased with the level of detail you're maintaining, Barry. If you keep this up during the coursework assessment, you should achieve an L4 blog.
Critique of Prisoner:
0:04 - I rather like the opening establishing shot, but a shame you went for a zoom - I would have preferred an ELS cutting to an CU. Unfortunately, as you can probably hear, you've got a lot of background noise - in the future, you might want to try exploring adding a soundtrack?
0:08 - I like the composition of this shot; it's very well framed.
0:17 - Again, an interesting angle. The music is reasonably well balanced, although as mentioned, the background audio is something of an imposition (particularly the wind). Is Barry supposed to be acknowledging the guy who enters in the next shot?
0:27 - Good ELS here. Again, the composition is well considered
0:30 - I like the OtS you've used here; the movement works and contrasts well with your tripod mounted shots. The wind is still irritating. I think you're holding some of the shots a little longer than I would advise.
0:35 - A rather good POV here; you've got the angle right and again the framing is good - I like the trees and the sky. A shame this shot is so shakey; I think you might have benefitted from this one being on the tripod.
0:43 - The shot of the fist is good, although held too long - I think this would have benefitted from being a quick edit.
0:46 - The jump from BCU to ELS is effective, and I like the way you've shot the action here. The editing is impressive (although as I've said, would benefit from the shots being shorter).
0:57 - The cut here would be better if you lost the short .5s bit where they are out of shot. Better to cut to them as they enter. The pan is good - often difficult to get these as smooth. I think you would have been better to jump to the CU of the kicking after the first kick in the ELS. A shame that the kicking is a little shakey
1:18 - I like that you've cut to an LS (again, very well-framed) - the action here is well shot
1:23 - The shift to the different music is jarring - would be better with a cross-fade (or a fade in?)
1:25 - I like this shot of the lights, although if it's a POV, I would expect Reece to be looking into the camera.
1:35 - Good BCU, and some good editing with a range of shots being used
1:44 - I rather like this shot - quite edgy - would be nice if it was dollied through 180, although you've kind of replicated this. Not so keen on the cut to the LA at 1:56; you would expect to go to a CU or LS/ ELS, since this shot is very similar to the final shot of the 180
2:00 - Not so sure about this HA - are you trying to make Reece seem the weaker character? This seems to be a slightly forced shot. Impressed with the audio here - you've got the balance between dialogue and music well done.
2:18 - Could do with editing to Barry's dialogue slightly more quickly, since you lose the rhythm slightly. Similarly the next edit.
2:29 - The angle here is slightly odd, although it works reasonably well. Some of the later shots are held too long
2:34 - There is a slight continuity error here - Reece was bending down at a lower angle than he is at the start of this shot. The beating is held too long in LS; would be better to cut to some CUs in order to create the dynamic of the action. This final shot is perhaps the weakest of the piece, since the focus is somewhat lost
In summary:
This is an impressive first effort. There are some really inventive shots (an excellent range, vital for success in your final piece) and some excellent editing. Sound balance is generally good and continuity is reasonable. As mentioned, there are some flaws, which would be ironed out with a little more planning and some more focus during the editing. Marked at the standard of a final piece, this would be L3 (C-grade), which is really good for a first piece - it's probably one of the best "Prisoners" I've seen.